First Post

I am just going to start post up my works on line so that I can get feedback. I draw and found some websites that have encouraged me to take it a bit farther than I have. Hopefully some will be up in a weeks time. I am not a professional, I just like do it for a hobby and would like to see if any body would start posting tips for me. I also write a bit. I haven't got any new stuff, so people who do know me have read this one before. I promise there will be new stuff...eventually (it takes me forever to edit my work).

Capturing River Light: A Photograph

The sun began to rise.
Clouds rolled in
from a cracked pine wood frame,
blown by implied occidental winds.
The now lit clouds
broke the blanketing sunlight,
casting black shadows
over gray, tree-speckled earth.
Hard, white mountains became
bright, beaming blurs,
shards of light piercing through its
revealed crevices
The sky and everything that touched it
kept the sunlight from all...

except the river, who
weaved through the mountains,
rushed through the valleys
and took the light the sky and its satellites
locked away.

Flowing far
through the cracks in the pine wood frame,
the river moved on

So that is that. All critiques are very welcome and thank you.